Tuesday, November 14, 2017

Brodis Creative Piece Of Writing

A few weeks ago in Te Ngahere we created creative pieces of writing. We had to use language features in our writing like onomatopoeia, metaphors, similes and adjectives. I pretty much knew all of the language features but I just used them again. Our WALT was to create a creative piece of writing. Next time I am going to teach myself new things to do in my writing like Idioms.
  WALT: use similes and metaphors        

Once upon a time there was a girl named Sofia, Sofia is eleven years old is always wears shorts and t- shirts. She lived with her mother and father in a house near the beach.The beach she lived next to was named turtle bay, the beach was called turtle bay because there was always turtles in the water. The sun always shined onto the water. Turtle Bay was like a paradise of deep blue and green.

It was a sunday morning and Sofia was having breakfast she was having porridge, her  porridge was as hot as the sun. When Sofia finished eating breakfast she took her plate to the kitchen,  her plate was as dirty as a pig after it has rolled in the mud. Sofia went to get changed into her togs so she could go swimming at turtle bay so she could swim with turtle like she does every sunday after breakfast. So Sofia run out to turtle bay the ocean was an angry wolf sweeping the sands in search of food. Sofia made a big splash as she jumped into the water. Sofia started to swim with some of the turtles then she saw a turtle with a plastic bag around his neck like a rubberband around your hand.She said people have been not reducing, reusing or recycling.

Sofia rushed to the turtle and grabbed the turtle. Sofia rushed the turtle to her house near the beach and told her mum that the turtle was injured by the plastic bag around the turtle's neck. Sophias mum rung up the sea animals doctor and told the sea animals doctor that a sea turtle was injured by a plastic bag, the vet said to bring the turtle to the sea animal doctor immediately. Sophias mum, Sofia and the turtle rushed into the car and drives off  to the sea animal doctor. When they got there they rush threw the door to the front office and said we need a sea doctor immediately. The Turtle was finding it hard breath. The office lady was a nice cookie. The lady said go to the door on the left and you should she a animal doctor in there and the doctor will get the plastic of the turtle.So Sofias mum and Sofia took the turtle the room the lady said to go to. There was a sea animal doctor that said put the turtle on the bed so I can look at him. After the doctor looked at the turtle he cut the plastic of the turtle’s neck and the turtle looked much happier. Sofia’s mum and Sofia took the turtle back to turtle bay and released the turtle. Sofia put the turtle in the water and the turtle swam off to his friends. Sofia got into the car and said to her mum that we should make signs to tell people reduce reuse and recycle. So the next day Sofia and her mum put up signs everywhere about the turtle they helped and that people should reduce, reuse and recycle.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Brodi my name is Jahesha I go to Kawakawa Primary School. We are learning the parts of a narrative and we are making our own as well and ours are based on kiwiana. I like all your metaphors they are very descriptive bye.